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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different group who did regular physical activity in 2010. It's interesting to the bar chart. In I5 to 24, , Australian men's percentage of doing regular physical activity is 52. 8 and women's percentage is 47. 7. Compare with men and women, men's percentage is higher than women's percentage. However, bars's changed and interesting. After 25 to 64, men's percentage are increasing. In 25 to 34, men's percentage is 42. 2. Besides, In 35 to 44, the percentage more decrease until 39. 5. After over 45 age, a few increase like 43. 7, 45. 1 and 46. 7. However, the percentage coulan't over 50%. Then, women's percentages are increase until 54 age like 52. 5, 53. 3. AIthough women's percentages are decrease after 55 age, the percentages are higher than men's percentages. In conclusion, men did regular physical activity more than women when they were teenager and mid twenties. After mid-twenties, however, men's percentage was decreased and women's percentage was increase.
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group who did regular physical activity in 2010. It's interesting to the bar chart.

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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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