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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007. YpMN
The bar chart illustrates how many hours adolescents in Chester spent on seven activities each week between 2002 and 2007. Overall, the most popular activity over the period given was watching TV, whereas bowling was the least favourite. Going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping all showed an increase in the number of hours teenagers spent on these activities. The other pursuits showed a decrease in hours, except watching DVD's which fluctuated. Teenagers spent 25 hours on watching television in 2002 which increased to almost 40 hours in the final year. Both going to pubs and discos, and shopping more than doubled in hours from over 5 to over 15 and from over 5 to exactly 15 respectively. While teenagers occupied 10 hours doing homework in 2002, this figure dropped to just over 5 in 2007. Playing sport fell more dramatically from 10 hours to around 3 hours. Bowling was under 5 hours throughout the entire period declining by about 4 hours in total. The number of hours teenagers dedicated to watching DVD's was only 10 hours in first and final years, but reached a peak of over 15 hours in 2004 and 2005.
The bar chart illustrates how
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adolescents in Chester spent on seven

activities each week between 2002 and 2007.

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, the most popular activity
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the period
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was watching TV, whereas

bowling was the least
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. Going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping all
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showed
an increase in the number of
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hours
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teenagers
spent on these activities. The other pursuits
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showed
a decrease in
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hours
, except watching DVD's which fluctuated.

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Teenagers
spent 25
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on watching

television in 2002 which increased to almost

40
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hours
in the final year. Both going to pubs

and discos, and shopping more than doubled in
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from
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5 to
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15 and from
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5 to exactly 15
respectively
.

While
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teenagers
occupied 10
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doing homework in 2002, this figure dropped to
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5 in 2007. Playing sport fell more

dramatically
from 10
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to around 3
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. Bowling was under 5
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throughout the entire period declining by about 4
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in total. The number of
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teenagers


dedicated to watching DVD's was
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only
10
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hours
in
first
and final years,
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reached a peak of
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15
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in 2004 and 2005.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

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