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The graph shows different activities among old people

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The provided line graph compares 5 different activities which includes reading hiking theatre watching tv and surfing the internet for old people’s leisure time in US from 80’s to now It is clear from the graph that the percentage of some activities like hiking, reading and surfing the net are increased The other 2 activities are both have fluctuated trend and their number not really changed at last In 1980’s watching tv was the most popular entertainment for old people on the other hand surfing the net was the least popular among those people and other 3 activities were floated between these 2 Between 80’s and 90’s theatre decreased sharply among aged people (to 30%) while other hobbies experienced an increase in this period At this age that we are in, hiking leads the most dramatic increase(to 80%) although watching tv, reading, surfing the net and theatre catch less attention (65% 60% 50% and 45% respectively)
The provided line graph compares 5
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like hiking, reading and surfing the net
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are both have fluctuated trend and their number not
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was the most popular entertainment for
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hand surfing the net was the least popular among those
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decreased
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hobbies experienced an increase in this period

At this age that we are in, hiking leads the most dramatic increase(to 80%) although watching
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catch less attention (65% 60% 50% and 45%
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