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THE BAR CHART BELOW SHOWS INFORMATION ABOUT THE PROBLEMS PEOPLE HAVE WHEN THEY GO TO LIVE IN OTHER COUNTRIES

THE BAR CHART BELOW SHOWS INFORMATION ABOUT THE PROBLEMS PEOPLE HAVE WHEN THEY GO TO LIVE IN OTHER COUNTRIES BMGYX
The given chart compares the integration issues for three separate age groups who are living foreign countries. Units are measured in percentages. Overall, the are lots of problems for the youngest age group people. The greatest issue is language barrier among various aged groups while finding houses for live is the lowest. Fourty fife percent people 18-34 aged have difficulty for making friends and it is the highest problem for this group. Finding accommodation to accommodate in host country shows 40% and learning language 29% (18-34 aged groups). 36 percentage of people who are 35-54 age suffer from finding friends but learning language was 35 percent. Finding somewhere for housing is the biggest problem between people (35-54 ages) on the contrary 21% people over 55 aged have this issue. In this team's (over 55) find 22% difficulty for making friends and learning the local language is 53 %
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who are living foreign countries. Units
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lots of problems for the youngest
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group
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. The greatest issue is
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barrier among various
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aged
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groups
while finding
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houses
for
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live
is the lowest.

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people
18-34
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have difficulty for making friends and it is the highest problem for this
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. Finding accommodation to accommodate in host country
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40% and learning
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29% (18-34
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. 36 percentage of
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who are 35-54
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suffer from finding friends
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learning
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was 35 percent.

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(35-54
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on the contrary
21%
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over 55
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have this issue. In this team's (over 55) find 22% difficulty for making friends and learning the local
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is 53 %
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IELTS academic THE BAR CHART BELOW SHOWS INFORMATION ABOUT THE PROBLEMS PEOPLE HAVE WHEN THEY GO TO LIVE IN OTHER COUNTRIES

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