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The bar chart below illustrates the information about the expense of spending on goods (cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras) in the UK and France in 2010.

The bar chart below illustrates the information about the expense of spending on goods (cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras) in the UK and France in 2010. rbpXk
The bar chart below illustrates the information about the expense of spending on goods (cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras) in the UK and France in 2010. It is clear that the given charts shows that people in two countries had some similarities. The expenditure of them for cars was the highest and reached a peak. By contrast, the consumption in the UK and France spending on perfume hit the lowest point. The cost people spending on cars in the UK was stand at 400. 000 and this figure for France hit its highest point of more than 450. 000. The computers consumption in the UK and France as follows 350. 000 and 375. 000, decreased slightly when compared with cars. However, the expense people use for books in the UK still stayed high and had a big number, at over 400. 000 and this statistic for France’s consumer was lower, at equally 300. 000 in 2010. There was a lowest pounds for consuming perfume in two countries. In the UK, people tend to less using perfume than France, merely above 150. 000 and France was 200. 000. The last good was cameras which had a big different from two countries. The expense of spending on cameras in France was 150. 000, whereas there was more than 350. 000 of consumption.
The bar chart below illustrates the information about the expense of
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cars
was the highest and reached a peak. By contrast, the consumption in the UK and France
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on
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perfume
hit the lowest point.

The cost
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people
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in the UK was stand at 400. 000 and this figure for France hit its highest point of more than 450. 000. The
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consumption in the UK and France as follows 350. 000 and 375. 000, decreased
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cars
.
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use
for books in the UK
still
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number, at over 400. 000 and this statistic for France’s consumer was lower, at
equally
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than France,
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was cameras which had a
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from two countries. The expense of
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on cameras in France was 150. 000, whereas there was more than 350. 000 of consumption.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below illustrates the information about the expense of spending on goods (cars, computers, books, perfumes and cameras) in the UK and France in 2010.

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