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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. G6wL
The bar chart reveals the share ranked five sectors of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019, in addition, there is a prediction for 2029. Overall, it can be seen that Finance is the only section which achieved a considerable increase, on the other hand, there is a fourfold fall on Manufacturing, in the end. It is apparent from the sectors that there is a growth on Finance over time. In contrast, Manufacturing faces an incredible fall for that period. Finance obtained around 10 per cent rise, however, it is followed fourfold (from 20 per cent to 5 per cent) drop on Manufacturing. It is clear that other branches obtained various changes at given period. For example, both Food Processing and Oil, Coal and Gas follow nearly the same process, although their figures are different from each other. Namely, the portion of Food Processing is lower than Oil, Coal and Gas. In 2009 and 2029 their percentages are almost 10 and 25 per cent respectively, furthermore, in 2019 they consisted of just over 20 and 30 respectively. Even though Tourism was also 25 per cent, it falls down nearly 5 per cent.
The bar chart reveals the share ranked five sectors of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019,
in addition
, there is a prediction for 2029.
Overall
, it can be
seen
that Finance is the
only
section which achieved a considerable increase,
on the other hand
, there is a fourfold fall on Manufacturing, in the
end
.

It is apparent from the sectors that there is a growth on Finance over time.
In contrast
, Manufacturing faces an incredible fall for that period. Finance obtained around 10 per cent rise,
however
, it
is followed
fourfold (from 20 per cent to 5 per cent) drop on Manufacturing.

It is
clear
that other branches obtained various
changes
at
given
period.
For example
, both Food Processing and Oil, Coal and Gas follow
nearly
the same process, although their figures are
different
from each other.
Namely
, the portion of Food Processing is lower than Oil, Coal and Gas. In 2009 and 2029 their percentages are almost 10 and 25 per cent
respectively
,
furthermore
, in 2019 they consisted of
just
over 20 and 30
respectively
.
Even though
Tourism was
also
25 per cent, it falls down
nearly
5 per cent.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

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