Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The above chart depicts the various employment sectors which Birghton university graduates opted after their graduation in the year 2019.

The above chart depicts the various employment sectors which Birghton university graduates opted after their graduation in the year 2019. KJYk
The above chart depicts the various employment sectors which Birghton university graduates opted after their graduation in the year 2019. Overall, maximum students entered into Services industry, Manufacturing industry and education related streams. On the contrary, Sports and Charity are the fields where least number of students showed interest. In the year 2019, Students after graduating from Brighton University profession chosen were diversified. The majority were attracted towards Service industry with 33% of the total strength. The second major section of literates (around 16. 3%) opted for Manufacturing industry. Close to which, Education (14. 7%) and Politics and Government (12. 1%) were the streams pursued by given percentage of the batch. Conversely/In Contrast, there were some fields which were chosen by less graduates. Students shown least interest in Sports and Charity, with only 0. 1% and 0. 3% respectively choosing them for their profession. 2. 8 % of graduates opted for various fields collated as Other and 5. 6% pursued Civil services. Lastly, nearly the same percentage opted for Transport and warehouse (7. 6%) and Science and Technology (7. 8%).
The above chart depicts the various employment sectors which
Possible spelling mistake found.
Birghton
university graduates
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opted
after their graduation in the year 2019.

Overall
, maximum
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
entered into Services
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
, Manufacturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
and education related streams.
On the contrary
, Sports and Charity are the fields where
A determiner is probably missing here: "the least".
least
number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
interest.

In the year 2019,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Students
after graduating from Brighton University profession chosen
were diversified
. The majority
were attracted
towards Service
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
with 33% of the total strength. The second major section of literates (around 16. 3%)
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opted
for Manufacturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
. Close to which, Education (14. 7%) and Politics and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
(12. 1%) were the streams pursued by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
percentage of the batch.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Conversely
/
In Contrast
, there were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fields which
were chosen
by
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun graduates is countable.
less
graduates.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Students
shown
A determiner is probably missing here: "the least".
least
interest in Sports and Charity, with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
0. 1% and 0. 3%
respectively
choosing them for their profession. 2. 8 % of graduates
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opted
for various fields collated as Other and 5. 6% pursued Civil services.
Lastly
,
nearly
the same percentage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opted
for Transport and warehouse (7. 6%) and Science and Technology (7. 8%).
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The above chart depicts the various employment sectors which Birghton university graduates opted after their graduation in the year 2019.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The above chart depicts the various employment sectors which Birghton university graduates opted after their graduation in the year 2019.