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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. 05Bq
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in salmon's life cycle, from incubation to maturation. In order to born and grow until become the adult salmon, there are 2 main areas that salmon live their life. First is living in the river when it is baby salmon and then move to the estuary when they are grow and mature. The starting point of the life cycle of a salmon start with having sprawn between two adult salmons in the river and incubate. After hatching from its egg, baby salmons live in freshwater before it grow enough to swim to estuary area. Teenage salmon live in the estuary area for a while, then it migrate to rearing areas where is in the ocean. salmon grow and become mature in this area. Finally, when it ready to incubate, it migrates back to the river where it is a suitable spawning area for them.
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in salmon's life cycle, from incubation to maturation.

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born
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grow
until become the adult salmon, there are 2 main
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that salmon
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their life.
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is living in the river when it is baby salmon and then
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to the estuary when they are
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grow
and mature.

The starting point of the life cycle of a salmon
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between two adult salmons in the river and incubate. After hatching from its egg, baby salmons
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live
in freshwater
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before
it
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grow
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enough
to swim to estuary area.

Teenage salmon
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live
in the estuary
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area
for a while, then it
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migrate
to rearing
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areas
where is in the ocean.
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salmon
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grow
and become mature in this
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, when
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it
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to incubate, it migrates back to the river where it is a suitable spawning
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for them.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

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