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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countrie. Write a report for a uriversity lecturer describing the information shown below

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countrie. Write a report for a uriversity lecturer describing the information shown below PdXd
The chart illustrates the money consumed on six consumer goods in European countries such as Germany, Italy, France and Britain. In personal stereos and tennis racquets Britain was the only one which contributed the highest around more then 115 thousand pounds equally in both the sectors. whereas France was seen to spent the least on this particular areas of consumer goods with roughly 150 and 145 thousand pounds respectively. As for the perfumes again Britain ranks on the top with the most amount spent compared to other countries where Italy hold the second position followed up by Germany and France. In the CDs and toys Germany invested the least amount but Italy and France invested equivalent amount in the toys area As for Britain the spending expenditure was high in CDs, toys and photographic film in front of other nations. Overall, in all the consumer goods sectors. Britain supposed to spent the highest while France was marked to spent the lowest in the European region.
The chart illustrates the money consumed on six consumer
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in European countries such as Germany, Italy, France and Britain. In personal stereos and tennis racquets Britain was the
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one which contributed the highest around more
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115 thousand pounds
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the least on this particular areas of consumer
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with roughly 150 and 145 thousand pounds
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. As for the perfumes again Britain ranks on the top with the most amount
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compared to other countries where Italy
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the second position followed up by Germany and France. In the CDs and toys Germany invested the least amount
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Italy and France invested equivalent amount in the
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area As for Britain the spending expenditure was high in CDs, toys and photographic film in front of other nations.
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, in all the consumer
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sectors. Britain supposed to
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the highest while France
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the lowest in the European region.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countrie. Write a report for a uriversity lecturer describing the information shown below

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