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(Task 1) The provided bar graph illustrates information about the percentage of individual who ate Fruit and Vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 to 2008.

(Task 1) The provided bar graph illustrates information about the percentage of individual who ate Fruit and Vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 to 2008. q1WrE
The provided bar graph demonstrate the information about the proportion of individuals who consumed five portion of produce Fruit and edibles per day in the UK between 2001 to 2008. Overall, it is evident from the data that the highest percentage of women ingested fruit and salad. On the contrary, children consumed less as compared with females. To begin with, in the year 2001 to 2003 youngsters ate some part of fruit and green vegetables near around to 12%. But, males ingested little more than infants in the same year. It was 16 %. Moreover, the females ate excessive amount of beer fruit and roots in 2001. It was 20%. After that, the percentage of consumed edibles and fruit were significantly inclined in next years 2002-2005. It was 29%. Probing head, the men and teenagers ingested approximately 20% Fruit and Vegetables in 2004 to 2006. However, the women touch the peak 30% who ate bear fruit and salad in 2006. Furthermore, in the next years 2006 to 2008 both males and children also consumed more fruits and produce vegetables near about to 25% 28% and 30% respectively.
The provided bar graph demonstrate the information about the proportion of individuals who
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consumed
five portion of produce
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Fruit
and edibles per day in the UK
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between 2001 to 2008
.
Overall
, it is evident from the data that the highest percentage of women ingested
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fruit
and salad.
On the contrary
, children
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consumed
less
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as
compared with females. To
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begin
with, in the
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year
2001 to 2003 youngsters ate
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some
part of
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fruit
and green vegetables near around to 12%.
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, males ingested
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little
more than infants in the same
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year
. It was 16 %.
Moreover
, the females ate excessive amount of beer
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fruit
and roots in 2001. It was 20%. After that, the percentage of
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consumed
edibles and
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fruit
were
significantly
inclined in
next
years 2002-2005. It was 29%. Probing head, the
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men
and
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teenagers
ingested approximately 20%
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Fruit
and Vegetables in 2004 to 2006.
However
, the women touch the peak 30% who ate bear
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fruit
and salad in 2006.
Furthermore
, in the
next
years 2006 to 2008 both males and children
also
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consumed
more
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fruits
and produce vegetables near about to 25% 28% and 30%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic (Task 1) The provided bar graph illustrates information about the percentage of individual who ate Fruit and Vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 to 2008.

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5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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