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TASK 1 The first bar chart below provides information about the price increase of various consumer products from 2007 to 2014, while the second bar chart illustrates the changes in purchases of the same products from 2007-2012.

TASK 1 The first bar chart below provides information about the price increase of various consumer products from 2007 to 2014, while the second bar chart illustrates the changes in purchases of the same products from 2007-2012. nXGWg
The first provided bar chart shows the rise in the price of some consumption goods over seven years starting from 2007, while the second one demonstrates the alterations in purchases of the same product in families with low salaries. Overall, in the first chart it can be seen that the cost of various consumer products witnessed a significant increase from 2007 to 2014. From the second chart we can see the considerable rise in the purchases of flour while the number of families buying the other products dropped. In the first chart, we can be informed that the price of fish witnessed the most considerable rise at over 35 percent, while that of vegetables saw the less significant one at about 25 percent. The cost for both flour and fruit rose nearly 35 percent in 2014. The prices of soft drinks and cheese increased 25 percent and 30 percent, respectively. The second chart illustrate that the percentage of flour purchases underwent the highest increase to about 90 percent, while there was a significant decrease in the proportion of people buying fish
The
first
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shows
the rise in the price of
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consumption
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goods
over seven years starting from 2007, while the second one demonstrates the alterations in
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purchases
of the same product in families with low salaries.

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, in the
first
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chart
it can be
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seen
that the cost of various consumer products witnessed a significant increase from 2007 to 2014. From the second
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chart
we can
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see
the considerable rise in the
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purchases
of flour while the number of families buying the other products dropped.

In the
first
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chart
, we can
be informed
that the price of fish witnessed the most considerable rise at over 35
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percent
, while that of vegetables
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saw
the less significant one at about 25
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percent
. The cost for both flour and fruit rose
nearly
35
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percent
in 2014. The prices of soft drinks and cheese increased 25
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percent
and 30
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percent
,
respectively
.

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The
second
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chart
illustrate that the percentage of flour
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purchases
underwent the highest increase to about 90
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percent
, while there was a significant decrease in the proportion of
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people
buying fish
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IELTS academic TASK 1 The first bar chart below provides information about the price increase of various consumer products from 2007 to 2014, while the second bar chart illustrates the changes in purchases of the same products from 2007-2012.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
180 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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