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The pie chart below shows the native language spoken by students and Bakersfield senior school in two separate years

The pie chart below shows the native language spoken by students and Bakersfield senior school in two separate years PRGKw
The given pie charts illustrate, the information about the percentage of different native languages which is spoken by scholars at Bakersfield senior college in years 1980 as well as 1990. After analysing, it can be clearly seen that, the proportion of native language urdu was 15% in 1980 at Bakersfield senior college and in 1990 it rose by 28%. 9% chinese language which is spoken by students in 1980 as well as a 2% increased in 1990. The pie-chart further collate that, in 1980 and 1990, english language spoken by students 70% and 55% respectively. However, the percentum of other languages which is spoken by scholars for identical in both years. Overall, It is evident that urdu and chinese languages increased whereas english was declined in given years. On the contrary, other languages remained same.
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spoken by students 70% and 55%
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, It is evident that
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urdu
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increased whereas
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the native language spoken by students and Bakersfield senior school in two separate years

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