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Task 1. Graphic of Canadian' donations in 2000 and 2015

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The chart presents a contrast between the donations made on 2000 and 2015 in different levels of Canadian' ages. While the quantity of Canadian who were part of charity' donation in 2000, not only the highest age was people between 35 to 49 year, but also, the rest of the ages' groups has a positive participation on charitable organizations in the country. Meanwhile, the participation of population in 2015 decraese in all levels presented in the chart, although the group of 50 to 64 years has a positive engagement in this year reaching more than 35 percentage, but the participation of the 18 to 24 ages group has only the 10% in contribution to donations. With this contrast is clear that Canadian in 2000 has a higer sense to helping charitable organizations than the population in 2015, reaching almost 40% of contibutions in the country.
The chart presents a contrast between the donations made on 2000 and 2015 in
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different
levels of Canadian' ages.

While the quantity of Canadian who were part of charity' donation in 2000, not
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only
the highest age was
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people
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 35 and 49".
between 35 to 49
year,
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but
also
, the rest of the ages' groups has a
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positive
participation on charitable organizations in the country.

Meanwhile, the participation of population in 2015
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decraese
in all levels presented in the chart, although the group of 50 to 64 years has a
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positive
engagement in this year reaching more than 35 percentage,
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but
the participation of the 18 to 24 ages group has
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only
the 10% in contribution to donations.

With this contrast is
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clear
that Canadian in 2000 has a
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higer
sense to helping charitable organizations than the population in 2015, reaching almost 40% of
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contibutions
in the country.
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IELTS academic Task 1. Graphic of Canadian' donations in 2000 and 2015

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4 paragraphs
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