Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

tabular chart braches of london bakerys average sales

tabular chart braches of london bakerys average sales 0ANjO
The tabular chart shows the information about the three different branches of London bakery’s average sales in 2015. Overall, it can be clearly seen that, London convent garden was maximum number of transactions compared to other two branches. To start with, , maximum number of transactions was London convent garden about 642 and about 538 and at least was London john’s wood only 269. Furthermore, transaction value was London convent garden, oxford circus and john’s wood were about $7. 58 and $4. 51 and $5. 01 respectively. Moreover, London convent garden people were eat more all about 304 and its popular item was croissant. Next, London oxford circus was maximum take away transactions as compared to eat in transactions and its popular item was medium latte. London john’s wood were highest transaction in east and lowest to take away transaction and its popular item was strawberry tact.
The tabular chart
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the information about the three
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
branches of London bakery’s average sales in 2015.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that, London convent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
was maximum number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
compared to other two branches.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with,
Two consecutive commas
,
maximum number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
was London convent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
about 642 and about 538 and at least was London john’s wood
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
269.
Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transaction
value was London convent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
, oxford circus and john’s wood were about $7. 58 and $4. 51 and $5. 01
respectively
.

Moreover
, London convent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
were eat more all about 304 and its popular item was croissant.
Next
, London oxford circus was maximum take away
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
as compared to eat in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transactions
and its popular item was medium latte. London john’s wood were
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transaction
in east and lowest to take away
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transaction
and its popular item was strawberry tact.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic tabular chart braches of london bakerys average sales

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
147 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts