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Table represents 2 surveys done in the year 1980 and 2010 for the living aspects of the community

Table represents 2 surveys done in the year 1980 and 2010 for the living aspects of the community KlpbR
The two table illustrates difference in the living aspects of the community in the year 1980 and 2019. The ratings are categorised as good, bad and average. Overall, education, healthcare and environment were given rather higher ratings by the community in both years. While transportation facilities continued to receive the lowest score. In the year 1980 education, healthcare and environment sectors would have been given a good amount of nurturing which resulted in higher positive ratings while, shops, employment sectors and transport aspect scored a mediocre ratings. However, In the year 2010 there was a significant amount of improvement seen in the employment aspects where 72% gave a good rating compared to 62%. In regards to the environment and shopping the approval rates rather remained unchanged
The two table illustrates difference in the living aspects of the community in the
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1980 and 2019. The
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ratings
are
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as
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good
,
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and average.
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, education, healthcare and environment were
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higher
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ratings
by the community in both years.
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transportation facilities continued to receive the lowest score. In the
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1980 education, healthcare and environment sectors would have been
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given
a
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good
amount of nurturing which resulted in higher
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positive
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ratings
while, shops, employment sectors and transport aspect scored a mediocre
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ratings
.
However
, In the
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2010 there was a significant amount of improvement
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seen
in the employment aspects where 72% gave a
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good
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rating
compared to 62%.
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the environment and shopping the approval rates
rather
remained
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IELTS academic Table represents 2 surveys done in the year 1980 and 2010 for the living aspects of the community

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  American English
1 paragraphs
125 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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