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Describe the line graph academic writing task 1

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The line graph demonstrates about the percentage of the population aged sixty five and in 100 years, 1940-2040, USA, Japan, Sweden countries. Overall, the percentage of the population aged sixty five in Japan slightly more than those in other two particular countries Sweden and USA. However, the percentage of the population was upward trend in all three countries given the period years. It observed that in the first year, the percentage of the population stood at 9% and noticeably rise to reach about 15% in USA, over between 1940 and 2020. In Sweden, it stood at 7% in 1970 and markedly increased to over the next 60 years to levelled of at 15%, after which it moderately went up to 19% until 2020. In Japan, it stood at 5% in 1940 and slightly fluctuated around over the next 60 years to reach about 8%. Then, there will be a moderate growth of the proportion of the population in the last 20 years and it will reach about 23% in USA. In Sweden, there will be a marked rise in the next 20 years to level off at 25%. In Japan, there will be an unexpectedly boom in the last 20 years and it will reach 27%
The line graph demonstrates about the
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percentage
of the
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population
aged
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sixty five
and in 100 years, 1940-2040, USA,
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Japan
, Sweden countries.
Overall
, the
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percentage
of the
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population
aged
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sixty five
in
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Japan
slightly
more than those in other two particular countries Sweden and USA.
However
, the
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percentage
of the
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population
was upward trend in all three countries
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given
the period years. It observed that in the
first
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year
, the
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percentage
of the
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population
stood at 9% and
noticeably
rise to
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reach
about 15%
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in USA
, over between 1940 and 2020. In Sweden, it stood at 7% in 1970 and
markedly
increased to over the
next
60 years to levelled of at 15%, after which it
moderately
went up to 19% until 2020. In
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Japan
, it stood at 5% in 1940 and
slightly
fluctuated around over the
next
60 years to
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reach
about 8%. Then, there will be a moderate growth of the proportion of the
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population
in the last 20 years and it will
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reach
about 23%
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in USA
. In Sweden, there will be a marked rise in the
next
20 years to level off at 25%. In
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Japan
, there will be an
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unexpectedly boom
in the last 20 years and it will
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reach
27%
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IELTS academic Describe the line graph academic writing task 1

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
205 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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