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Survey results: reasons for moving

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The line chart sets out the reasons for the relocation of people to the capital city of the country based on the recent surveys. As the chart shows, the main reason that persuades people to move from small cities to the capital city of a country is employment from 2000 to 2015. Other reasons that have an effect on people's relocation are their educational goals, their family and friends and adventure. In 2000, the most important factor that made people move to capital cities was employment, then the lower important reason was education and then we have joint-lowest factors: family/friends and adventure. Later in other years, we have the same order for the reasons of people migration to capital cities. For instance, we have joint-highest factors: employment and educational aims then family/friends and finally, adventure. The adventure factor grew gradually during the period up to 15, 000. The number of people how were forced to relocate to capital cities have been risen steadily from 2000 to 2010 and then stayed the same in 2015 approximately. The number of folks that decided to migrate to capital cities grew rapidly from 2000 to 2010 and has risen sharply from 2010 to 2015 and finally, the chart shows that the number of people how relocated to the capital cities to follow their career has been rising from 2000 to 2010 and then called smoothly to 88, 000 people in 2015.
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city of the country based on the recent surveys. As the chart
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city of a country is employment from 2000 to 2015. Other
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was employment, then the lower
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. The
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grew
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, the chart
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to follow their career has been rising from 2000 to 2010 and then called
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IELTS academic Survey results: reasons for moving

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
237 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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