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Student Academic Problems for two different schools in 2005 and 2015

Student Academic Problems for two different schools in 2005 and 2015 q0o5E
The table depicts the problems that were faced by children in 2005 and 2015 at two different primary schools. The data is in percentage. It is clear that students studying at school A tends to have more education problems in comparison to school B students. In 2005, 40% of the students studying in school A had issue with concentration. The same issue was decreased by 25% for school A students in 2015. Furthermore, it was noticed that reading ability issue in school A increased from 22% to 23% in the time span of 10 Years. The issue of lack of concentration for school B students increased from 15% in 2005 to 18% in 2018. The handwritten problem remained constant at 8% for school B student.
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A tends to have more education problems
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B
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in 2015.
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A increased from 22% to 23% in the time span of 10 Years. The
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of lack of concentration for
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B
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increased from 15% in 2005 to 18% in 2018. The handwritten problem remained constant at 8% for
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IELTS academic Student Academic Problems for two different schools in 2005 and 2015

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
125 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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