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Some people say that art is essential for children at school. While others think it is just a waste of time. WHat idea do you agree or disagree with? Write at least 250 words.

Some people say that art is essential for children at school. While others think it is just a waste of time. WHat idea with? 6LwMB
It is thought that non-academic subjects are necessary for pupils at school. Others claim that they are just time-consuming. I agree that they may not help us much, we should not neglect them either. On one hand, I accept that art isn't very helpful. Firstly, companies are now trying to seek for skilled employees who know well about science and linguistics, such as Maths, Literature, and English. So those subjects should be compulsory. My school can be an example for this. In my school, academic subjects are required and non-academic ones are optional. Secondly, good knowledge in natural science and social science is undoubtedly essential. Everyday tasks need them and art can't help solve those tasks. My father is another good example. He's a mathematician. And thanks to his competence in Maths, he manages to solve a lot of everyday problems. Despite so, I still believe that art is not to be counted out. For one thing, they help us develop social skills. Now, companies are not just trying to find someone competent in Maths for example, they also find people with good collaboration and confidence. These social skills can undeniably be improved through art lessons rather than a Literature lesson in a classroom. I had experienced something like that. Once, I was very shy, but through PE lessons, I gradually improved my shyness and finally it has gone away without my knowing it. Furthermore, subjects such as Music and Arts should be compulsory. If a school decides to remove them out of the must-study list, some students good at them will be denied their talent, and will not have any chances to develop their talent. For instance, if art had been abolished, we would never have the fortune to hear Mozart's songs or see some amazing pictures from Picasso. In short, I accept that art may not be very helpful to us, it should not be neglected by any means.
It is
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thought
that non-academic
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subjects
are necessary for pupils at
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school
. Others claim that they are
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just
time-consuming. I
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agree
that they may not
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help
us much, we should not neglect them either. On one hand, I accept that
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art
isn't
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very
helpful.

Firstly
,
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companies
are
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now
trying to seek for skilled employees who know well about science and linguistics, such as
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Maths
, Literature, and English.
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So
those
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subjects
should be compulsory. My
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school
can be an example for this. In my
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school
, academic
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subjects
are required
and non-academic ones are optional.
Secondly
,
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good
knowledge in natural science and social science is
undoubtedly
essential. Everyday tasks need them and
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art
can't
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help
solve those tasks. My father is another
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good
example. He's a mathematician. And thanks to his competence in
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Maths
, he manages to solve
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a lot of
everyday problems.

Despite
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so
, I
still
believe that
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art
is not to
be counted
out. For one thing, they
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help
us develop social
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skills
.
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Now
,
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companies
are not
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just
trying to find someone competent in
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Maths
for example
, they
also
find
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people
with
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good
collaboration and confidence. These social
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skills
can
undeniably
be
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improved
through
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art
lessons
rather
than a Literature lesson in a classroom. I had experienced something like that. Once, I was
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very
shy,
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but
through PE lessons, I
gradually
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improved
my shyness and
finally
it has gone away without my knowing it.
Furthermore
,
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subjects
such as Music and
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Arts
should be compulsory. If a
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school
decides to remove them out of the
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must
-study list,
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some
students
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good
at them will
be denied
their talent, and will not have any chances to develop their talent.
For instance
, if
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art
had
been abolished
, we would never have the fortune to hear Mozart's songs or
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see
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some
amazing pictures from Picasso.

In short, I accept that
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art
may not be
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very
helpful to us, it should not
be neglected
by any means.
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IELTS academic Some people say that art is essential for children at school. While others think it is just a waste of time. WHat idea with?

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321 words
6.0
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