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Nowadays, people are worried about health, education and especially life expectancy. This essay will address the positive aspect and disadvantage of the given issue and give my opinion. First of all, the advantage of increased life expectancy is old people can be helpful. Consequently, our life is so fast and some of us don’t have enough time to do housework and take care of their children. In addition, old people got lots of experiments and can give us advises when we got trouble. For instance, my Dad used to show me some taekwondo’s to save me when I got dangerous and gave me a lot of advises in the education and life experienced. However, it caused over population. There will be no where for old people to live. For example in China, they can’t live in the rent house because of living standard is more and more higher so they just lived in the small apartment. In conclusion, the disadvantages of the increased of life expectancy outweigh the advantages. Nowadays, the world is going more higher and higher with new technology and great education but the population problems always still there and we have to find ways to solve this issue properly.

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positive
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some
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, it caused over population. There will be Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?now
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people
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house
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because
 of living standard is more and Use only "higher" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.higher
more higher
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so
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small
 apartment.

In conclusion
, the disadvantages of the increased of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
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 expectancy outweigh the advantages. Nowadays, the world is going Use only "higher" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.higher
more higher
 and higher with new technology and great education This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the population problems always still
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there and
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have to
 find ways to solve this issue properly
. 