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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion x6l9
The bar graph shows the earnings of a country in billions in year 2015 and 2016 of five major categories of exports and the table represents the variation in the exports in each categories for the year 2016. In 2015 and 2016 the most valued export product remained to be petroleum products, whereas the least being textiles in 2015 and agricultural products along with textile in 2016. Now, looking at the variations in each categories, the highest increase was noted in the textile export, which showed the surge of 15. 24% in 2016 as compared to 2015, followed by engineered goods at an increase of 8. 5% in the same year. While the petroleum product export increased only by a slight margin by 3%, from 60% to 63%, the agricultural products also showed a minimal surge at 0. 81% in 2016. There was a considerable drop of 5. 18% in the only product in 2016, which was gems and jewellery.
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and the table represents the variation in the
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in each
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for the year 2016.

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remained to be petroleum
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, whereas the least being textiles in 2015 and agricultural
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along with textile in 2016.

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, which
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the surge of 15. 24% in 2016 as compared to 2015, followed by engineered
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at an increase of 8. 5% in the same year.

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increased
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by a slight margin by 3%, from 60% to 63%, the agricultural
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a minimal surge at 0. 81% in 2016.

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in 2016, which was gems and
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IELTS academic Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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