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Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Qo9w
The diagrams illustrate some proposed changes to the central area of the town of Islip. It is clear that the principal change to the town will be the construction of a ring road around the centre. Various other developments with regard to shops and housing will accompany the building of this road. Looking at the map of Islip as it is now, we can see that a main road runs through its centre from east to west. The second map shows the planned pedestrianisation of this road. Traffic will be diverted on to a dual carriageway that will form a ring around the town centre. Currently there is a row of shops along either side of the main road. However, it appears that the shops along the north side of the new pedestrian street will be demolished to make way for a bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing area. The shops along the south side of the street will remain, but it seems that the town’s park will be reduced in size so that more new houses can be built within the ring road.
The diagrams illustrate
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to the central area of the
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of
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Islip
.

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clear
that the principal
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change
to the
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will be the construction of a ring
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road
around the
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centre
. Various other developments with regard to
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shops
and housing will accompany the building of this road.

Looking at the map of
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Islip
as it is
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now
, we can
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that a main
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runs through its
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centre
from east to west. The second map
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shows
the planned
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pedestrianisation
of this
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. Traffic will
be diverted
on to a dual carriageway that will form a ring around the
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town
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centre
.

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Currently
there is a row of
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shops
along either side of the main
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road
.
However
, it appears that the
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shops
along the north side of the new pedestrian street will
be demolished
to
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make
way for a bus station, shopping
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centre
, car park and new housing area. The
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along the south side of the street will remain,
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but
it seems that the
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town’s
park will be
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reduced
in size
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that more new
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can
be built
within the ring
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IELTS academic Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues.

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  American English
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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