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Scientists and technology expert seems to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

The bar chart comparatively illustrates the exports of various categories. The table talks about the changes in the value of each category of exports in 2015 and 2016. According to the statistical data, In the year 2015, petroleum product is the highest with 60%. Whereas, it kept its position stable in 2016 with 62%. which is quite impressive. Moreover, engineers’ goods and g and jewelry are at second and third places in both years. The textile category is the least earning sector in 2015 with 21%but it is escalated its profit ratio in 2016 and it stands besides ap with 31% Moving to the percentage change in values, the petroleum products hiked by 3%. Textiles category is dramatically escalated by 15. 5% which is the biggest among all other sectors. Whereas, G and j are drastically decreased by 5. 18%. Furthermore, ap and eg escalated by 0. 81% and 8. 5%. Overall, in 2016 Ap and textile profit are similar. Engineer's value is the second highest. Comparatively 2015 to 2016 earning are quite increased.

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