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People moving from rural to urban areas

People moving from rural to urban areas mpV1

The diagram shows the stages in the making of fish pie. The process begins with the delivery of main ingredients to the production sites, and ended up when the fish pie is ready to be sold and distributed. Firstly, when the stocks have arrived, the potatoes need to be cleaned and then peeled. Next steps is slicing the potatoes, and after that it needs to be boiled. Before it can be stored, the potatoes needs to be left to cool down after the boiling process. At the same time, fresh salmon have to be seasoned with lemon juice and salt before it undergoes cooking in the steam oven, followed by removal of skin and bones and quality inspection for any kind of damage. All of the ingredients including potatoes, salmon, peas and sauce will be mixed up in a container and then wrapped. Finally, the fish pie manufacturing is completed. The fish pie needs to be frozen before it can be stored or dispatched.

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 the stages in the making of fish You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprofitablebeneficialachievableadvantageousexpedientlikely
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pie
 is ready to be sold
 and distributed.

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potatoes
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need
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potatoes
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needs
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needs
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left
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be seasoned
 with lemon juice and salt This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 it undergoes cooking in the steam oven, followed by removal of skin and bones and quality inspection for any kind of damage. Consider using "all the".All the
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 ingredients including You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potatoes
, salmon, peas and sauce will be mixed
 up in a container and then wrapped. Finally
, the fish You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprofitablebeneficialachievableadvantageousexpedientlikely
pie
 manufacturing is completed
. The fish You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprofitablebeneficialachievableadvantageousexpedientlikely
pie
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needs
 to be frozen
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before
 it can be stored
 or dispatched. 