These two pie charts give information about the highest levels of education attained by people in two different countries, with data drawn from people aged over twenty-one. In both nations, secondary school was the highest level of qualification achieved by the largest number of people.
In country A, 45% of people had secondary school as their highest level of education, compared to 35% in country B. Notably, both nations had exactly 30% of people giving vocational or technical school as their highest educational qualification. In this respect, the two countries were quite similar.
However, in country B, a quarter of the population had attended university, compared to just 5% in country A. Conversely, in country A it was much more likely that people had attended primary school as their highest level of education. In both nations, just 5% of the population had not gotten any form of education at all.
Notes
This essay uses more numbers but not too many. The grammar here is accurate but it is based upon an assumption that I have made – that the data is from the past. Of course, it could not be from the future and it is unlikely to reflect the present. However, you could theoretically describe this with the present simple tense.
Notice my structure: I have discussed both countries within each body paragraph. I did this in order to highlight differences more effectively. I thought that if I described one pie chart and then another, it would not be so obvious how they differed.
These two pie charts give information about the highest
levels
of
education
attained by
people
in two
different
countries
, with data drawn from
people
aged over twenty-one. In both nations, secondary
school
was the highest
level
of qualification achieved by the largest number of
people
.
In
country
A, 45% of
people
had secondary
school
as their highest
level
of
education
, compared to 35% in
country
B.
Notably
, both nations had exactly 30% of
people
giving vocational or technical
school
as their highest educational qualification.
In
this respect, the two
countries
were quite similar.
However
, in
country
B, a quarter of the population had attended university, compared to
just
5% in
country
A.
Conversely
, in
country
A it
was much more likely that
people
had attended primary
school
as their highest
level
of
education
. In both nations,
just
5% of the population had not gotten any form of
education
at all.
Notes
This essay
uses
more numbers
but
not too
many
. The grammar here is accurate
but
it
is based
upon an assumption that I have made
–
that the data is from the past.
Of course
, it could not be from the future and it is unlikely to reflect the present.
However
, you could
theoretically
describe
this with the present simple tense.
Notice my structure: I have discussed both
countries
within each body paragraph. I did this in order to highlight differences more
effectively
. I
thought
that if I
described
one pie chart and then another, it would not be
so
obvious how they differed.