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Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The six given charts compare 6 regions' utilisation of water in terms of three conventional sectors via percentage. Overall, developed countries in both North America and Europe are proved to have utilized a big amount of water on manufacturing purposes relatively. It can be seen that all the areas in which agricultural use come out first, are namely Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia. The contribution of three emphasised are 84%, 83% and 81% respectively. However there is an exceptional region, South America where agricultural goals do not live up to its global degree. In other words the region spent more water on farming unlike the other developed countries. In comparison to dominant countries, it shows that they both deal more with industry by standing at a half of the whole. With regards to domestic use, Asia and Africa comprised 16% in total. Whereas powered regions contributed almost 50% together.

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 powered regions contributed almost 50% together. 