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Percentage of Tasmanian Men and Women Playing Team Sports: 2015

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The bar chart indicates, the information about the percentage of male and female as per their ages who had played in Tasmanians competitive team sports in 2015. Overall, the popular age group with most of the young people who had taken part in Tasmanian playing team sports was the age group of 20-29. Whereas, the lowest participants who had the least members of males and females in team were 50 and over. To begin, the most number of people were in the group of 19 and under where 55% of males and 53% females were the part of this group. Similarly, the age group of 20-29 had the 58% of males in their team but the participation of the females had huge difference as similar as the age group of 19 and under where only 32% of females had participated. Moreover, the age group of 30 to 39 had 40% of males and 10 percent less females as players. Furthermore, the percentage ratio in the group of 40-49 had the approximate 30 percent of participants. Whereas, 50 and over aged group had 25% males and 25% of females as the participants of Tasmanians competitive team sports.
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sports in 2015.

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sports was the
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of 20-29. Whereas, the lowest participants who had the least members of
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in
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were 50 and over.

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of 30 to 39 had 40% of
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of 40-49 had the approximate 30 percent of participants. Whereas, 50 and over aged
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had 25%
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