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Percentage of Canadian donors by age group from 2000 to 2015

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The given bar graph shows five number of age groups in Canada who donated to charities in the year 2000 and 2015. Age group of 35 to 49 and 50 to 64 being at the top position throughout the years. In 2000, highest charity payer age group was of 35 to 49 old with 38% and it slightly depleted to 34% in 2015. On the other hand, in 2000 age group of 50 to 64 was at second position with 34% and went to the top position in 2015 with 37%. People in the group of 60 and over donated to charities with 31% in 2000 and it increased in small amount up to 34% in 2015. The working age group of teenagers and adults from 18 to 24 and 25 to 34 comprised less in both the years. Age group of 18 to 24 was 20% in 2000 and which became nearly half in 2015 with 11%. Consequently, the retired age groups donated more to the charities than the working class group in the years 2000 and 2015.
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of 35 to 49 and 50 to 64 being at the top position throughout the years. In 2000,
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