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Participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities

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The table illustrates the engagement of men and women over the age of 15 in chosen sports and physical recreation activities in Australia from 2011 to 2012. In general, Australian females were more involved in sports and recreational activities than males, but the total gap was insignificant. Additionally, walking accounted for the highest percentage of male and female participation. With respect to men, walking for exercise was the most common option, reaching 16. 5% and nearly half as much as women. There were several popular types of sports on which males spend their time such as fitness/gym, cycling/BMXing and jogging/running with the proportion of namely 15. 1%, 9. 8% and 8. 7%. The sports and activities exclusively intended for Australian men were golf, outdoor football and basketball, making up 8. 2%, 4, 1% and 2. 8% respectively. Regarding female involvement, the figure for walking was by far the highest among other chosen sports and activities, hitting a peak of 30. 4%. There was a slightly greater proportion of women than men taking part in fitness/gym (19. 1% compared to 15. 1%) and swimming/diving (8. 0% compared to 7. 5%). Australian females also participated in some certain physical activities such as netball and yoga, with the percentage of 4. 5% and 3. 3%, whereas the two activities recorded no engagement of males.
The table illustrates the engagement of
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men
and women over the age of 15 in chosen
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sports
and physical recreation
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activities
in Australia from 2011 to 2012.
In general
, Australian
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females
were more involved in
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sports
and recreational
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activities
than
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males
,
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but
the total gap was insignificant.
Additionally
, walking accounted for the highest percentage of male and
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female
participation.

With respect to
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men
, walking for exercise was the most common option, reaching 16. 5% and
nearly
half as much as women. There were several popular types of
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sports
on which
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males
spend their time such as fitness/gym, cycling/
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BMXing
and jogging/running with the proportion of
namely
15. 1%, 9. 8% and 8. 7%. The
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sports
and
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activities
exclusively intended for Australian
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men
were golf, outdoor football and basketball, making up 8. 2%, 4, 1% and 2. 8%
respectively
.

Regarding
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female
involvement, the figure for walking was by far the highest among other chosen
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sports
and
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activities
, hitting a peak of 30. 4%. There was a
slightly
greater proportion of women than
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men
taking part in fitness/gym (19. 1% compared to 15. 1%) and swimming/diving (8. 0% compared to 7. 5%). Australian
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females
also
participated in
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some
certain physical
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activities
such as netball and yoga, with the percentage of 4. 5% and 3. 3%, whereas the two
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activities
recorded no engagement of
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males
.
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IELTS academic Participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities

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6.5
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