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parent give childent everything they want

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Many parents may accommodate children’s demands, which could arouse various concerns. A child’s personality will get worse due to their parents' tendency to be permissive. To start with, children become accustomed to getting whatever they find it difficult to accept the limits imposed on them by rules, which may incline them to do criminal actions. Children are not capable of full independence and can harm them as adults. For example, adulthood is prone to rebellion when their needs are not met, the inability to be fully independent. So they don’t know how to control their life and handle unexpected situations that happen to them.

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Many
 parents may accommodate children’s demands, which could arouse various concerns. A child’s personality will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 worse due to their parents' tendency to be permissive. To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 with, children become accustomed to getting whatever they find it difficult to accept the limits imposed on them by This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
, which may incline them to do criminal actions. Children are not capable of full independence and can harm them as adults. For example
, adulthood is prone to rebellion when their needs are not met, the inability to be fully
 independent. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 they don’t know how to control their life and handle unexpected situations that happen to them. 

IELTS academic parent give childent everything they want

Academic

American English

1 paragraphs

104 words

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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

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