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Ownership of Electrical appliances

Ownership of Electrical appliances 7WED2
The line charts detail total percentages of electronics in a given country from 1920 to 2019 and the results on housework per week. Looking from all perspective, it is readily apparent all electrical appliances became more popular, in particular refrigerators and vacuum cleaners. The total time spent doing housework has also declined steadily and dramatically in the last hundred years. Refrigerators witnessed the most significant rise, beginning at merely over 0% in 1920, surging to more than 50% by 1950, and then continuing to rise steadily unpleasant at 100% around 1980. Vacuum cleaners started higher at 30% and then rose by precisely 20% every 20 years until 1960 when growth tapered and ownership ultimately reached 100% by 1980. In contrast, proportions for washing machines began at 40%, climbed to 70% by 1960, then fell slightly, and recovered to finish the period at merely above 70%. The result for housework was that time spent washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning fell steadily from 50 hours a week in 1920 to 20 by 1960. After that, the decline was more gradual, reaching slightly above 10 hours by 2019.
The line charts detail total percentages of electronics in a
given
country from 1920 to 2019 and the results on housework per week. Looking from all perspective, it is
readily
apparent all electrical appliances became more popular,
in particular
refrigerators and vacuum cleaners. The total time spent doing housework has
also
declined
steadily
and
dramatically
in the last hundred years.

Refrigerators witnessed the most significant rise, beginning at
merely
over 0% in 1920, surging to more than 50% by 1950, and then continuing to rise
steadily
unpleasant at 100% around 1980. Vacuum cleaners
started
higher at 30% and then rose by
precisely
20% every 20 years until 1960 when growth tapered and ownership
ultimately
reached 100% by 1980.
In contrast
, proportions for washing machines began at 40%, climbed to 70% by 1960, then fell
slightly
, and recovered to finish the period at
merely
above 70%.

The result for housework was that time spent washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning fell
steadily
from 50 hours a week in 1920 to 20 by 1960. After that, the decline was more gradual, reaching
slightly
above 10 hours by 2019.
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IELTS academic Ownership of Electrical appliances

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
186 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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