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Online sales for retail sectors in New Zeland foe 2003 and 2013

Online sales for retail sectors in New Zeland foe 2003 and 2013 GPgm

The chart provides data about online shopping in New Zeland for two different years: 2003 and 2013. Starting with the first year, it is noticeable that travel was the sector with the highest percentage, with about 36%. On the other hand, film/music and clothes industries were similar with a range between 21% and 24%. Unfortunately, books were not as sold as all the other products New Zeland offers in various sectors. Secondly, for the year 2013, film/music and books sector had a surprising increase of sales, leaving them with 33% and 22% in that order. For the travel industry the sales decreased but not as radically as the clothes sector, with a reduction of almost 8%. We can notice how the entertainment industry has been growing much more than the clothes or even the travel sectors. Books, film and music increased their sales in a laps of 10 years and it will continue that way.

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