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Number of whales sightings from Springbay Lighthouse, 2009-2013

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The line graph depicts the evidence about the number of whale spotting from Springbay Lighthouse in years between 2009 to 2013. It is cleared that, generally the trend is rising from 2009 to 2013. From year 2009, in which the number was near 45, it slightly once dipped to 40 in 2010, but it jumped to 105 in 2011, after that it never went that down, although there was a little variation too between the year 2011 to 2013, where the number goes down to 90 in 2012 but in 2013, it bounced back again to 110, smaller ups and down may occur between the years ahead but it can be confidently said that there will be probably an increase in the whale sighting been continued in the succeeding years too.

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IELTS academic Number of whales sightings from Springbay Lighthouse, 2009-2013

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