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The diagrams below illustrate changes affected in the district park between 2004 and 2014.

The diagrams below illustrate changes affected in the district park between 2004 and 2014. aAmeG
The diagrams show the changes that have been made in the district park in the time span of ten years. Overall, there were many new additions that have been made, as well as there was notable increase in the area of car park. In the year 2009, no cycling path was available, which had been constructed after ten years. Furthermore, children's soft play area has been developed to the south of children's play area. Toilets were constructed in the ground to the north of green area. Additionally, green area of the ground was widened and a café is constructed in it. New boating area was developed near the pond and on its western side, a new picnic area was developed. The capacity of the car park which was 20 cars, was increased and it can accomodate 50 cars. In contrast, no changes were made in entrance, football ground and tennis courts.
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. Toilets
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area
.
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of the ground
was widened
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area
was developed
near the pond and on its western side, a new picnic
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area
was developed
. The capacity of the
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park which was 20
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,
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50
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, no
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changes
were made
in entrance, football ground and tennis courts.
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