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The bar chart illustrates how many visitors came to art galleries in 6 countries in 2011. It can be seen from the graph that the most visitors came to Louvre Museum in France, is 8. 8 million. With 6 million visitors, the Metropolitan Museum of Art in USA came in second. The third place, which is British Museum in UK has about 5, 8 million people came here. Number of sightseer to National Museum of Korea was about 3. 2 million. Besides, Museo del Prado in Spanish had half the number of guest as the British Museum. State Hermitage, which located in Russia, had the least people visit, about 2. 8 million. Overall, in 2011 approximately 30 million people visited the museums mentioned above. Louvre is the most attractive museum and has a lot of guest come there.
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to Louvre
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