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The line graph represents the data of overseas students and local graduates enrolled in Australian universities over a decade starting from 1989 ranging up to 1999. To begin with, nearly 10000 overseas students were commencing out of total enrollment of 20000 in year 1989. Both the number of commencing student and total student kept on increasing over a period of ten years. In 1999, the amount of student starting education was just above 40000. Moreover, the total enrollment was double of commencing students in year 1999. Additionally, in 1989, the regional students beginning study in Australian universities were about 180000. Same year there were total 400000 local students. The amount of student enrolling in course peaked in year 1990-91 then it showed fluctuation and by end of 1999 it was just above 200000. However, the number of total enrolments of local student kept on increasing steadily till year 1996 and then flattened at 600000 up-to 1999. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of overseas students starting their education in Australian universities and total enrollments is increased from 1989 to 1999.
The line graph represents the data of overseas
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and local graduates enrolled in Australian universities over a decade starting from 1989 ranging up to 1999.

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10000 overseas
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were commencing out of
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enrollment of 20000 in
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1989. Both the number of commencing
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and
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on increasing over a period of ten years. In 1999, the amount of
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starting education was
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above 40000.
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enrollment was double of commencing
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in
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1999.

Additionally
, in 1989, the regional
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beginning study in Australian universities were about 180000. Same
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there were
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400000 local
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students
. The amount of
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enrolling in course peaked in
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1990-91 then it
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fluctuation and by
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of 1999 it was
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above 200000.
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kept
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1996 and then flattened at 600000 up-to 1999.

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that the proportion of overseas
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starting their education in Australian universities and
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enrollments
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from 1989 to 1999.

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