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NBS-7108B- Managing People and Organisations Formative 2: Individual Peer Review Structure- This presentation is about Leadership and Management.

NBS-7108B- Managing People and Organisations Formative 2: Individual Peer Review Structure- This presentation is about Leadership and Management. 8W25
NBS-7108B- Managing People and Organisations Formative 2: Individual Peer Review Structure- This presentation is about Leadership and Management. They explained vividly the definition of Leadership by giving references of Chobanuk and James (2015), Northouse (2016), Bratton, (2015) after adding the definition of Management by Zaleznik 1992) and explained the reason why we need management. The structure of the presentation starts with the definition of Leadership and Management, compare with their differences and similarities, benefits, and importance, followed by the example by taking a case study of Toyota Company and at the end conclusion. Content- In this presentation, group divided it into the key areas which were the definition, benefits, similarities, and conclusion. If talk about the content, they stick to the topic. They describe the situation with diagrams and pictures. The purpose of the presentation during the presentation is clear. Group was able to organize the information effectively. Also, they convey the information and ideas in a logical order. They started the presentation by giving definition, differences, similarities, benefits, importance and at the end was the conclusion. They also quoted the example of the Toyota company, Pongpearchan (2016). How they transformed and get success in their leadership in Thailand? They explained the vision and mission of the company. They told in the presentation what kind of leadership is required, which skills and behavioral should they possess, so that they can influence the other people in the organization. In their presentation, they used many diagrams, flow-chart, and tables according to the requirement of the content. They keep some notes handy in case they forget something. The problem was with the conclusion, where they were not able to comprise it. Group Effectiveness: - The tone of the group was consistent throughout the presentation. Not only verbally, but they also try to make the topic more understandable by their good body language. Although the interaction with the audience, was very less. They just in a little bit in a hurry to complete the presentation. I also find out that information on some slides was too much or in some slides, it's too less. They succeeded in creating a good decorum with the audience while presenting the presentation. Future Development: - They can provide more information related to the topic, for instance, new area where leadership and management can work together and where can they differ related to the real world. More research is required to elaborate the topic, though they are well – versed with it. In my opinion, they can name some of the famous leaders related to the current companies, and through some lights on their achievements and failure. Recent researches can be added, to make the presentation more interactive. More interaction with the audience is required. In the end, if there is any doubt by any student, time should be given for asking questions. References McGrath, James, and Bob Bates. The Little Book of Big Management Theories. . . and How to Use Them. Second edition, Pearson Education, 2017. Fire and rescue services: leadership and management perspectivesBook 2017 – Springer Science+Business Media Lebby, Andrew M. “Leadership Is an Art, by Max DePree. (1989). New York: Doubleday. 136 Pp. , $17. 95 Cloth. ” Human Resource Development Quarterly, vol. 2, no. 4, 1991, pp. 409–12. DOI. org (Crossref), doi: 10. 1002/hrdq. 3920020415.
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Organisations
Formative 2: Individual Peer Review

Structure- This
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presentation
is about
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Leadership
and
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Management
. They
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explained
vividly
the
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definition
of
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Leadership
by giving references of
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Chobanuk
and James (2015),
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Northouse
(2016),
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Bratton
, (2015) after adding the
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definition
of
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Management
by
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Zaleznik
1992
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and
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explained
the reason why we need
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management
. The structure of the
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presentation
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starts
with the
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definition
of
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Leadership
and
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Management
, compare with their differences and similarities, benefits, and importance, followed by the example by taking a case study of Toyota
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Company
and at the
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end
conclusion.

Content- In this
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presentation
, group divided it into the key areas which were the
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definition
, benefits, similarities, and conclusion. If talk about the content, they stick to the
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topic
. They
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describe
the situation with diagrams and pictures. The purpose of the
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presentation
during the
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presentation
is
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clear
. Group was able to organize the
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information
effectively
.
Also
, they convey the
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information
and
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ideas
in a logical order. They
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started
the
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presentation
by giving
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definition
, differences, similarities, benefits, importance and at the
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end
was the conclusion. They
also
quoted the example of the Toyota
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company
,
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Pongpearchan
(2016). How they transformed and
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get
success in their
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leadership
in Thailand? They
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explained
the vision and mission of the
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company
. They
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told
in the
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presentation
what kind of
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leadership
is required
, which
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skills
and behavioral should they possess,
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so
that they can influence the other
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people
in the
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organization
. In their
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presentation
, they
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used
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many
diagrams, flow-chart, and tables according to the requirement of the content. They
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keep
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some
notes handy in case they forget something. The problem was with the conclusion, where they were not able to comprise it.

Group Effectiveness:
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The tone of the group was consistent throughout the
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presentation
. Not
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only
verbally
,
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but
they
also
try to
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make
the
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topic
more understandable by their
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good
body language. Although the interaction with the audience, was
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very
less. They
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just
in a
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little bit
in a hurry to complete the
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presentation
. I
also
find out that
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information
on
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some
slides was too much or in
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some
slides, it's too less. They succeeded in creating a
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good
decorum with the audience while presenting the presentation.

Future Development:
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-
They can provide more
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information
related to the
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topic
,
for instance
, new area where
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leadership
and
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management
can work together and where can they differ related to the real world. More research
is required
to elaborate the
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topic
, though they are well
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–
versed with it. In my opinion, they can name
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some of the
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famous
leaders related to the
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current
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companies
, and through
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some
lights on their achievements and failure. Recent researches can be
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added
, to
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make
the
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presentation
more interactive. More interaction with the audience
is required
. In the
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end
, if there is any doubt by any student, time should be
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given
for asking questions.

References

McGrath, James, and Bob Bates. The
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Little
Book of
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Big
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Management
Theories.
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and
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Them. Second edition, Pearson Education, 2017.

Fire and rescue services:
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leadership
and
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management
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perspectivesBook


2017
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–
Springer Science+Business Media

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Lebby
, Andrew M.
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“Leadership
Is an Art, by Max
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DePree
. (1989). New York: Doubleday. 136 Pp.
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,
$17. 95 Cloth. ” Human Resource Development Quarterly, vol. 2, no. 4, 1991, pp. 409–12. DOI.
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. 3920020415.
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IELTS academic NBS-7108B- Managing People and Organisations Formative 2: Individual Peer Review Structure- This presentation is about Leadership and Management.

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
551 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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