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Naming health problems and treatments

Naming health problems and treatments VP1Y7
A comprehensive health system is a good tool for the civilian. The well administer in hospital can bring many benefits to the patients and gets efficient results. In general, a patient needs to visit general practitioner for the first examines and screens, such as blood tests. According to the result, GP will referred some patients to specialist doctors. The special doctor can diagnosed the various disease, like cancer, obesity, allergy and stroke. Some diseases caused by bad behaviours for example, smoke can gets cancer or heart disease due to the person addict to nicotine. An other example, overeat is the easest way to have obestiy. Obestiy is cause by a long-term bad diet and the surgery is a good option to controlled patient weights. During the recovered period, the infection is one of the main content after operation, therefore, admit and discharged patients are the dominant procedures. There are some disease are happens in specific seasons or age. Obvious summer can let people get dehydration easily and new born babies needs vaccinated by law, also the strokes are frequently happened in elder generation.
A comprehensive health system is a
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good
tool for the civilian. The well administer in hospital can bring
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many
benefits to the
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patients
and
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gets
efficient results.
In general
, a
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patient
needs to visit general practitioner for the
first
examines and screens, such as blood
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tests
.

According to the result, GP will
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referred
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some
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patients
to specialist doctors. The special doctor can diagnosed the various
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disease
, like cancer, obesity, allergy and stroke.
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Some
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diseases
caused by
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bad
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behaviours
for example
, smoke can
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gets
cancer or heart
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disease
due to the person addict to nicotine.
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An other
example, overeat is the
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easest
way to have
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obestiy
.
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Obestiy
is
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cause
by a long-term
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bad
diet and the surgery is a
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good
option to controlled
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patient
weights.

During the recovered period, the infection is one of the main content after operation,
therefore
, admit and discharged
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patients
are the dominant procedures.

There are
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some
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disease
are happens in specific seasons or age. Obvious summer can
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let
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people
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get
dehydration
easily
and new born babies needs
"needs vaccinated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try "vaccinating" or "to be vaccinated".
vaccinated
by law,
also
the strokes are
frequently
happened in elder generation.
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IELTS academic Naming health problems and treatments

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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