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món quà sinh nhật tuổi 17

món quà sinh nhật tuổi 17 BLygp

I am going to tell you about a gift I received. It was a smart phone from my father on my 15th birthday. Well, having a smart phone on my own was my dream. I needed it for its benefits. So I was jealous of my friends who had smartphones. Therefore I was very happy for my birthday present. My smartphone looks nice, slim, and light. It was covered with gorilla glass, touch screen in the back, in the front respectively. As you know, using a smartphone is not difficult, especially for young people who are accustomed to modern technology. So I find it easy to use my phone as well. To use it, you only press the power button and unlock your phone by password or fingerprint. Then you can add apps to your phone by going to the app store or play store. After that, All you need to do is to tap your apps to enjoy them. This present is very important to me because it is what I desired for a long time. More importantly, my smartphone from my father who I love most.

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 apps to your You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
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 by going to the app store or play store. After that, All you need to do is to tap your apps to enjoy them.

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