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Many working people get no or little exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise. What can be done about this problem.

Many working people get no or little exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise. What can be done about this problem. 87yw
We cannot deny the truth, that nowadays maximum individulas love to lead a sedentary life, that is they do not get enough time for their healthy exercise. It is a common thing that doing nothing is a method of bringing ailments into life. In this essay we will discuss the grounds such as busy schedule, distracting gadgets with that we talk about its solutions like encouraging workers towards sports. To commence with, the first and foremost reason for above issue is ftrenetic time table. In offices an employee has to accomplish his task before its deadline or sometimes before it. This made their life a hectic life that they are not able to devote time in fittness. Moreover, in present mostly youngsters and senior citizens involve themselves in technology which means, everyone invest time in using social apps. For instance, it has been observed by DU students during survey that 97 percent of world strength spend maximun hours on mobiles. However, to solve the problems companies must organise yoga, exercise tutorials at working places. This all made employess to do exercise without going gyms. Even though exercise reduce the weight gain of a person, diet also play a significant role for better health; therefore provision of healthy diet ought to be considered by department as well as organisation. To conclude, I believe that sedentary lifestyle is on the top just because of wortk burdern and small distraction suxh as mobile phones and televisions. The only solution for this is that government or companies make a number of policies to inspire demgraphians for healthy fittness.
We cannot deny the truth, that nowadays maximum
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individulas
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love
to lead a sedentary
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life
,
that is
they do not
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get
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enough
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time
for their healthy
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exercise
. It is a common thing that doing nothing is a method of bringing ailments into
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life
. In this essay we will discuss the grounds such as busy schedule, distracting gadgets with that we talk about its solutions like encouraging workers towards sports.

To commence with, the
first
and foremost reason for above issue is
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ftrenetic
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time
table. In offices an employee
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has to
accomplish his task
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before
its deadline or
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sometimes
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before
it. This made their
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life
a hectic
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life
that they are not able to devote
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time
in
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fittness
.
Moreover
, in present
mostly
youngsters and senior citizens involve themselves in technology which means, everyone
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invest
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time
in using social apps.
For instance
, it has
been observed
by DU students during survey that 97 percent of world strength spend
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maximun
hours on mobiles.

However
, to solve the problems
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companies
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must
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organise
yoga,
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exercise
tutorials at working places. This all made
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employess
to do
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exercise
without going gyms.
Even though
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exercise
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reduce
the weight gain of a person, diet
also
play a significant role for better health;
therefore
provision of healthy diet ought to
be considered
by department
as well
as
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organisation
.

To conclude
, I believe that sedentary lifestyle is on the top
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just
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of
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wortk
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and
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distraction
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as mobile phones and televisions. The
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only
solution for this is that
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government
or
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companies
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make
a number of policies to inspire
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demgraphians
for healthy
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fittness
.
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IELTS academic Many working people get no or little exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise. What can be done about this problem.

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