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Make real comparisons of the details in two paragraphs. Look at the major differences and similarities to make comparisons. Don’t just tell what we can plainly see on the graph, compare.

Make real comparisons of the details in two paragraphs. Look at the major differences and similarities to make comparisons. Don’t just tell what we can plainly see on the graph, compare. eRMkK
For analysis we have to examine a diagram that presents the alterations for a school in the year 2004 and then 20 years later in 2024. (Introduction) As a general starting point, we can see that the student body is expected to increase by 400 students over the 20 year time period. In addition to this clear point, we can also see that by the year 2024 the school buildings, roads, and car parks are expected to increase from 2004. (General Overview Paragraph) Beginning with the school buildings, in 2004 there are two buildings that are separated by a path; however, in 2024 these two buildings are connected by a short corridor or hallway, and the path now leads to a third school building that is larger than either of the initial 2004 buildings. When it comes to the sports field, we can see that the planners will cut the sports field by approximately half. Moving on to the car park, in 2004 one car park exists near the main entrance which is on the left of school building one, but in 2004 they will add second school building by cutting the sports field in at least half. In 2004, there is one short road on the bottom left of the property; however, in 2024 a second road will be added that runs behind school building two, in front of the sports field, and into car park 2.
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examine a diagram that presents the alterations for a
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2004 and then 20 years later in 2024. (Introduction)

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that the student body is
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expected
to increase by 400 students over the 20
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time period.
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point, we can
also
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that by the
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2024 the
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, roads, and
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are
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to increase from 2004. (General Overview Paragraph)

Beginning with the
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, in 2004 there are two
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that
are separated
by a path;
however
, in 2024 these two
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are connected
by a short corridor or hallway, and the path
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now
leads to a third
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school
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that is
larger than either of the initial 2004
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buildings
. When it
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to the
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, we can
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that the planners will
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by approximately half.

Moving on to the
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, in 2004 one
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exists near the main entrance which is on the
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in 2004 they will
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second
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by cutting the
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in at least half. In 2004, there is one short road on the bottom
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left
of the property;
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, in 2024 a second road will be
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that runs behind
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two, in front of the
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, and into
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IELTS academic Make real comparisons of the details in two paragraphs. Look at the major differences and similarities to make comparisons. Don’t just tell what we can plainly see on the graph, compare.

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5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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