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LThe given line graph higlights data concerning the price for watching films whereas pie chart indicate the proportion of market share over a 6 years period from 2005 to 2011 Overall, what stands out from line graph is that cinema tickets were much more higest figure among others. However this reflected to going to the cinemas and it amounted to significantly the least fraction in 2011 in the pie chart As for, Renting DVD started at merely 6& in 2005 which was slightly lower than legal downloading at 8&. After which the percentage of DVD rose relatively to 8& in the end of period
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data concerning the price for watching films whereas pie chart indicate the proportion of market share over a 6 years period from 2005 to 2011
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, what stands out from line graph is that cinema tickets were much more
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figure among others.
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However
this reflected to going to the cinemas and it amounted to
significantly
the least fraction in 2011 in the pie chart As for, Renting DVD
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6& in 2005 which was
slightly
lower than legal downloading at 8&.
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which the percentage of DVD rose
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IELTS academic line graph with pie chart

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
103 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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