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Leisure activities boys and girls enjoy

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The pie chart depicts the survey results of boys and girls who participate in cultural and leisure activities. One pie chart has all the data related to boys and the activities they are indulged in whereas the other diagram shows the acitivities girls are interested in. Both the pie charts are uneven and it is pretty evident that the acitivites that interest girls and different from those of boys. Majority of girls are attracted towards dance as per the pie chart, on the other hand computer games seems to be boys favourite activity. Boys are quite attracted by computer games and almost 34% of boys are into this. The next thing that comes is the outdoor game which happens to basket ball in this case which is played by 26% of the boys. Another outdoor game that boys spend time is the Soccer game and 17% guys enoy to spend thier time playing. Skateboarding and Listening to music does not have much of difference, 11% and 10% of boys enjoy these respectively. Reading is something that boys do not really enjoy beacuse only 2% of them take interest as their leisure activity. Dancing seems to be girls favouriteleisure time as 27% of girls are into this activity. Though reading also interests 21% of he crowd but dance has taken a leap here. Computer games and Netball is the leisure acitvity of 16% and 15% of girls. Gymnastics, an acitivity to keep the body flexibility interests around 11% of the girls. Listening to music has the same reference by girls as well which is 10%. Overall, music and computer games are somthing that both sexs enjoy but computer games breaking the record with 34% is the highest.
The
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depicts the survey results of
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boys
and
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girls
who participate in cultural and leisure activities.

One
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has all the data related to
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boys
and the activities they
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in whereas the other diagram
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shows
the
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acitivities
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girls
are interested
in.

Both the
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are uneven and it is pretty evident that the
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acitivites
that
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interest
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girls
and
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different
from those of boys.

Majority of
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girls
are attracted
towards dance as per the
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pie
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chart
,
on the other hand
computer
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games
seems to be
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boys
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favourite
activity.

Boys are quite attracted by computer
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games
and almost 34% of
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boys
are into this. The
next
thing that
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is the outdoor game which happens to basket ball
in this case
which
is played
by 26% of the boys.

Another outdoor game that
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boys
spend time is the Soccer game and 17% guys
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enoy
to spend
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thier
time playing.

Skateboarding and Listening to music does not have much of difference, 11% and 10% of
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boys
enjoy these
respectively
.

Reading is something that
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boys
do not
really
enjoy
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beacuse
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only
2% of them take
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interest
as their leisure activity.

Dancing seems to be
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girls
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favouriteleisure
time as 27% of
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girls
are into this activity.

Though reading
also
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interests
21% of
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crowd
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but
dance has taken a leap here.

Computer
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games
and Netball is the leisure
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acitvity
of 16% and 15% of girls.

Gymnastics, an
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acitivity
to
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keep
the body flexibility
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interests
around 11% of the girls.

Listening to music has the same reference by
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girls
as well
which is 10%.

Overall
, music and computer
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games
are
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somthing
that both
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sexs
enjoy
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but
computer
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games
breaking the record with 34% is the highest.
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IELTS academic Leisure activities boys and girls enjoy

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286 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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