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Island before and after construction

Island before and after construction q5lla
The two maps show an island before and after the construction facilities made. To see the both maps, and summarise all the information by selecting and reporting main features, generally many new facilities devloped, like accomodation, reception, restaurant, and so on. Mainly those are not that affecting natural resource like trees and beach. Before construction was made, island and other place were empty. Then after the construction there were many tourists facilities devloped like reception, pier, accomodation. Interestingly trees were not cut down while bulit these construction and some of the facilites were devloped near by the beach. For the better communicating, foothpath and vehicle track have been bulit to facilitate the tourist. Foothpath were made to walk between residential place and so on beach. Pier area was created for sailing. To move forward to North reception have been made for any tourist information. Furthermore vehicle track were created to visit restaurant, it was located exactly behind the reception. In summarise all the information the island was mainly designed for better tourist facilities, also main motive is not affecting any natural resources that much
The two maps
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show
an island
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before
and after the
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construction
facilities made. To
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see
the both maps, and
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summarise
all the information by selecting and reporting main features,
generally
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many
new facilities
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devloped
, like
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accomodation
, reception, restaurant, and
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so
on.
Mainly
those are not that affecting natural resource like trees and beach.

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Before
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construction
was made
, island and other place were empty. Then after the
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construction
there were
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many
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tourists
facilities
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devloped
like reception, pier,
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accomodation
.
Interestingly
trees were not
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cut
down while
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bulit
these
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construction
and
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some of the
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facilites
were
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devloped
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near by
the beach.

For the better communicating,
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foothpath
and vehicle
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track
have been
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bulit
to facilitate the
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tourist
.
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Foothpath
were made
to walk between residential place and
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so
on beach. Pier area
was created
for sailing. To
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move
forward to North reception have
been made
for any
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tourist
information.
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Furthermore
vehicle
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track
were created
to visit restaurant, it
was located
exactly behind the reception.

In
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summarise
all the information the island was
mainly
designed for better
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tourist
facilities,
also
main motive is not affecting any natural resources that much
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IELTS academic Island before and after construction

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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