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INFORMATION CONCERNING THE ATTENDANCE FIGURES OF FOUR DISTINCT MUSEUMS IN LONDON FROM JUNE TO DECEMBER IS DEPICTED IN THE GIVEN BAR CHART.

INFORMATION CONCERNING THE ATTENDANCE FIGURES OF FOUR DISTINCT MUSEUMS IN LONDON FROM JUNE TO DECEMBER IS DEPICTED IN THE GIVEN BAR CHART. DlqqE
INFORMATION CONCERNING THE ATTENDANCE FIGURES OF FOUR DISTINCT MUSEUMS IN LONDON FROM JUNE TO DECEMBER IS DEPICTED IN THE GIVEN BAR CHART. OVERALL, WHAT IS NOTABLE FROM THE CHART IS THAT EXCEPT FOR THE BRITISH MUSEUM WHICH GREW IN POPULARRITY, THE OTHERS SAW STEEP AND MODERATE DECLINES AT THE END OF THE GIVEN PERIOD. IN JUNE, THE HISTORY MUSEUM, THE BRITISH MUSEUM AND THE SCIENCE MUSEUM HAD SIMILAR FIGURES, RAGING FROM 410, 000 TO 430, 000, WHILE THAT FOR THE NATIONAL MUSEUM WAS TWO-FOLD LOWER THAN THE THREE (200, 000). A MONTH AFTER, THESE NUMBERS DECLINED GRADUALLY WITH THE EXCEPTION FOR THE BRITISH MUSEUM WHICH REMAINED STABLE. AUGUST SAW A SHIFT IN THE PATTERN, AS THE NUMBER OF ADMISSIONS FOR THE HISTORY AND THE BRITISH MUSEUMS SOARED TO ALMOST 600, 000 AND 710, 000, IN TURN. MEANWHILE, THE FIGURE FOR THE NATIONAL MUSEUM MAINTAINED ITS JULY'S FIGURE OF ABOUT 400, 000, WHILE THAT FOR THE NATIONAL MUSEUM DOUBLED TO 390, 000. BY SEPTEMBER, THE FIGURES FALLEN BACK TO 390, 000, 590, 00, AND 200, 000 FOR THE HISTORY, THE BRITISH AND THE NATAIONAL MUSEUMS, RESPECTIVELY. THE OUTLIER, THE SCIENCE MUSUEM, ON THE OTHER HAND GREW BY 100, 000 TO REACH ITS HIGHEST RECORDED FIGURE AT 500, 000. AT THE END OF THE PERIOD, THE QUANTIY OF VISITORS TO ALL FOUR MUSEUMS FURTHER DECLINED, ALTHOUGH THE BRITISH MUSEUM REMAINED TO HAVE THE HIGHEST NUMBER OF VISITS MADE AMONG THE FOUR MUSEUMS.
INFORMATION CONCERNING THE ATTENDANCE
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FIGURES
OF FOUR DISTINCT
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MUSEUMS
IN LONDON FROM JUNE TO DECEMBER
IS DEPICTED
IN THE
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GIVEN
BAR CHART.

OVERALL
, WHAT IS NOTABLE FROM THE CHART IS THAT
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EXCEPT FOR
THE BRITISH
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MUSEUM
WHICH GREW IN
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POPULARRITY
, THE OTHERS
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SAW
STEEP AND MODERATE DECLINES AT THE
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END
OF THE
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GIVEN
PERIOD.

IN JUNE, THE HISTORY
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MUSEUM
, THE BRITISH
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MUSEUM
AND THE SCIENCE
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MUSEUM
HAD SIMILAR
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FIGURES
, RAGING FROM 410, 000 TO 430, 000, WHILE THAT FOR THE NATIONAL
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MUSEUM
WAS TWO-FOLD LOWER THAN THE THREE (200, 000). A MONTH AFTER, THESE NUMBERS DECLINED
GRADUALLY
WITH THE EXCEPTION FOR THE BRITISH
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MUSEUM
WHICH REMAINED STABLE. AUGUST
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SAW
A SHIFT IN THE PATTERN, AS THE NUMBER OF ADMISSIONS FOR THE HISTORY AND THE BRITISH
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MUSEUMS
SOARED TO ALMOST 600, 000 AND 710, 000, IN TURN. MEANWHILE, THE
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FIGURE
FOR THE NATIONAL
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MUSEUM
MAINTAINED ITS JULY'S
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FIGURE
OF ABOUT 400, 000, WHILE THAT FOR THE NATIONAL
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MUSEUM
DOUBLED TO 390, 000.

BY SEPTEMBER, THE
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FIGURES
FALLEN BACK TO 390, 000, 590, 00, AND 200, 000 FOR THE HISTORY, THE BRITISH AND THE
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NATAIONAL
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MUSEUMS
,
RESPECTIVELY
. THE OUTLIER, THE SCIENCE
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MUSUEM
,
ON THE OTHER HAND
GREW BY 100, 000 TO REACH ITS HIGHEST RECORDED
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FIGURE
AT 500, 000. AT THE
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END
OF THE PERIOD, THE
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QUANTIY
OF VISITORS TO ALL FOUR
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MUSEUMS
FURTHER
DECLINED, ALTHOUGH THE BRITISH
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MUSEUM
REMAINED TO HAVE THE HIGHEST NUMBER OF VISITS MADE AMONG THE FOUR
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MUSEUMS
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