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The chart shows the information about how many American people have problems with heart diseases annually. Overall, the number of heart-related patients in America have a tendency to increase and there is also a big difference between male and female patients. At the age of 29 to 44, the number of male patients are 123, 000 people, a lot more than that of female ones with only 3, 000 people. Similarly, men who are from 45 to 64 years old are three times as much as women at the same age. Remarkably, while the number of male patients at more than 65 years old decrease slightly, this figure of female ones increase dramatically from 136, 000 to 374, 000 people compared to the figure at the age of 44-64. According to the chart, it is clear that American men take a higher to heart-related diseases than women at all ages.

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