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In this text, we are going to analyse the following graph showing the average in three periods among the number of men and women in further education, and whether they were studying full time or part-time.

In this text, we are going to analyse the following graph showing the average in three periods among the number of men and women in further education, and whether they were studying full time or part-time. aqbYX
In this text, we are going to analyse the following graph showing the average in three periods among the number of men and women in further education, and whether they were studying full time or part-time. As it is shown, there is an upward trend with both male and females working part-time, owing to thousands in further education studied part-time in all periods, on the other hand, the number of people who studied full time does not exceed the number of 400. Female reached peak in 1990/91 with approximately 1500 in further education, surpassing male in all three periods. We saw a steady growth in females studying in both full time and part. time throughout 1980/81. Nevertheless, male dropped sharply in 1980/81 in part-time education, however full time started to increase in the same year, reaching its peak in 1990/91 with around 200. To sum up, we can conclude that both genders, no matter the ages, had part-time education.
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As it
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education
studied part-time in all periods,
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, the number of
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does not exceed the number of 400.

Female reached peak in 1990/91 with approximately 1500 in
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, surpassing male in all three periods. We
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time
throughout 1980/81.
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, male dropped
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education
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full
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to increase in the same year, reaching its peak in 1990/91 with around 200.

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IELTS academic In this text, we are going to analyse the following graph showing the average in three periods among the number of men and women in further education, and whether they were studying full time or part-time.

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