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In the above line graph, you should compare the changing trends between 1975 and 2000, and the differences between the three types of fast food.

In the above line graph, you should compare the changing trends between 1975 and 2000, and the differences between the three types of fast food. 1AlOA
The graph give information about changes in the popularity of different fast foods among Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000. Overall, It is apparent form information provided that the consumption of fish chips byr youngster decreased dramatically, while hamburger and pizza become more popular over the period shown. In 1975, the figures for fish chips usage was the highest, at 100 times per person annually. It fluctuated until 1985 and after that experience a sharp downward trend. While the number of teenager consumers of both hamburgers and pizza were less than 10 in 1975. The figures for hamburger increase until 1985 to reach 80, after that it saw a gradual rise to 100 in 2000. likewise there was an increase in proportion for pizza to reach about 80 in 1995. After that it experience a period of stability. at 2000, the most popular fast food was hamburger and the second highest was pizza. However it seems that fish and chips was not very popular among teenager at 2000.
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foods among Australian
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teenager
consumers of both hamburgers and pizza were less than 10 in 1975. The figures for hamburger increase until 1985 to reach 80, after that it
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a gradual rise to 100 in 2000.
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likewise
there was an increase in proportion for pizza to reach about 80 in 1995.
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that it experience a period of stability.
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2000, the most popular
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food was hamburger and the second highest was pizza.
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it seems that fish and chips was not
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popular among
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at 2000.
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IELTS academic In the above line graph, you should compare the changing trends between 1975 and 2000, and the differences between the three types of fast food.

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