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how tourism changed in Australia

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The graph illustrates how tourism changed in Australia and Germany between 1960 and 2010. It is clear from the given information that the percentage of Asian tourists had an enormous rise during the decades in both countries, while the proportion of British and European tourists fell significantly. In the case of Australia, the number of European tourists fell by 43%, which is the strongest largest decrease, while the proportion of British and American people fell just slightly. However the percentage of Asian visitors had an enormous rise of 53 % over this period. In Germany the most common visitors were European in both shown years, however 5 percent less tourists came in 2010 than in 1960. The percentage of Asian and American visitors had a decent growth, while the proportion of British tourists reduced considerably.

The graph illustrates how tourism This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 in Australia and Germany between 1960 and 2010.

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clear
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given
 information that the percentage of Asian You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
 had an enormous rise during the decades in both countries, while the proportion of British and European You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
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.

In the case of Australia, the number of European You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
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largest
 decrease, while the proportion of British and American This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
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slightly
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However
 the percentage of Asian visitors had an enormous rise of 53 % over this period.

In Germany the most common visitors were European in both shown years, however
 5 percent Did you mean "fewer"? The noun tourists is countable.fewer
less
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tourists
 came in 2010 than in 1960. The percentage of Asian and American visitors had a decent growth, while the proportion of British You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
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reduced
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