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in some nations the total weight of people is significantly rising and their levels of health and fitness are dropping down. This essay intends to discuss the main causes of obesity and suggest some measure to alleviate the problem

in some nations the total weight of people is significantly rising and their levels of health and fitness are dropping down. This essay intends to discuss the main causes of obesity and suggest some measure to alleviate the problem A30YX
To commence with, there some reasons that people is getting fat and one of them is fast food industry. The advent of fast food companies caused people`s healthy lifestyles and exercise. Individuals are opting a fast food restaurant meal and put homecooked meals away from themselves. Fast food meals have tempted people about doing regular exercise or making a homecooked meal even when they came from work and boosted people`s appetite. As a result, people should focus on their diet and healthy food, otherwise, they will have to deal with obesity or overweight problems. On the other hand, doing regular exercise would be the best option to decrease the level of obesity problems. Exercises will ensure the overweight people with keeping healthy and being strong to patent foods. For instance, to take a course for each day will encourage you to reduce your levels of weight and give you an opportunity to stay healthy. Today, there are many training programmes on the internet has become attainable for people who suffering from obesity. To sum up, one regular training could salvage a person`s life who is fat, conversly, he or she no matter will have to struggle with his or her difficult life. In conclusion, doing less exercise or buying fast food meals had negative impact on people`s health, however, we can significantly decrease obesity problems and enlighten people about this problem
To commence with, there
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fast
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industry. The advent of
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fast
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food
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companies
caused
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people`s
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healthy
lifestyles and
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exercise
. Individuals are opting a
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fast
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food
restaurant
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meal
and put
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homecooked
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meals
away from themselves.
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Fast
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food
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meals
have tempted
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people
about doing regular
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exercise
or making a
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homecooked
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meal
even when they came from work and boosted
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people`s
appetite.
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,
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people
should focus on their diet and
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healthy
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food
,
otherwise
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have to
deal with obesity or overweight
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problems
.
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, doing regular
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exercise
would be the best option to decrease the level of obesity
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problems
.
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Exercises
will ensure the overweight
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people
with keeping
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healthy
and being strong to patent
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foods
.
For instance
, to take a course for each day will encourage you to
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reduce
your levels of weight and give you an opportunity to stay
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healthy
.
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Today
, there are
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many
training
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programmes
on the internet has become attainable for
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people
who suffering from obesity. To sum up, one regular training could salvage a
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person`s
life who is
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fat
,
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conversly
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difficult life.
In conclusion
, doing less
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exercise
or buying
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fast
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food
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meals
had
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negative
impact on
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people`s
health,
however
, we can
significantly
decrease obesity
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problems
and enlighten
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people
about this
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IELTS academic in some nations the total weight of people is significantly rising and their levels of health and fitness are dropping down. This essay intends to discuss the main causes of obesity and suggest some measure to alleviate the problem

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  American English
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230 words
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